Reflection of feedback: I got great feedback on my video and all of my commenters said that I was
really engaging with the audience, which I tried to continue to be in this version of my pitch.
Additionally, I was told I had a very linear thought process and tried to utilize that strategy again and
build my ideas off of each other progressively so it made the most sense for my viewers.
What I changed in my pitch: This time I did my pitch, I tried to be more visually engaging to the
audience and monitor the inflections in my voice in order to increase their attention. Additionally, I
spoke about my ideal audience, which I did not do before. I believe by focusing on what I can offer to
the client more than what I can offer to businesses, the audience would be more inclined to listen to
my idea.
Hi Meghan, I liked the changes that you made to your elevator pitch. Adding in voice inflections to increase audience engagement really makes a big difference. Additionally, by talking more about your ideal audience you are able to give the audience (which are probably potential investors) a more clear view of how you will be able to make money.I felt very engaged throughout the entire 90 seconds.
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ReplyDeleteI think you made great changes to your elevator pitch. Your whole pitch was very engaging and your tone of voice made the pitch much more interesting. You made the necessary changes to ensure a great pitch. I also think that the content made sense and it was easy to follow. Great job!
Hi Meghan, I really liked your pitch, especially how engaged you sounded with the audience with your changes in tone. I also like how you talked about your ideal customer because that helps people better understand the business concept and who it is geared towards. Great job!
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